Help sprucing up this flash animation?

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Hi, all. I just joined (been reading for about two months.) I've been hired by Bowman Systems (http://www.bowmansystems.com) to do a Flash animation demonstrating their software, Servicepoint (servicept.com) , but I only learned flash shortly before getting the job, so my animation is sort of unimpressive, in my opinion. What can I do to help make this a little flashier -- not too over the top, this is a highly respected company, it has got to maintain the corporate aesthetic -- but, to liven it up, a little?

Here's the temporary page I threw this thing up on:

http://s92212976.onlinehome.us/Dpixl8/m ... /link.html

Any help / suggestions? I've got a .fla if anyone wants it - 3 mb.


Thanks
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My suggestion would be to move things along faster. I think you can do a better job of punctuating and emphasizing ideas if things snapped into place a little faster and tighter. I think it would be better if you cut down the copy a little.

I really didn't care for the copyright in the top-left corner.

If you're going to move things behind the controls at the bottom, I think you should put a background under the controls but above the moving bits.

My 2 cents.

//the controls are a bit confusing. I would seperate the navigation controls from the music controls.

HTH! :D
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Okay, thanks for the help - I took it all to heart, but what does this mean "cut down the copy a little"?
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Bump?
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I would recommend another type of music... hehe.... if they havent choosed it... i think that that music sounds like "im-on-the-beach"-music. :P
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I've been looking all over for a music substitute they'd like, but they seem pretty set on this one. Meh, oh well.


There are no other critiques?
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If they like your movie and are willing to pay for it... just sell it...... or what i shall say ^^
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I know. They're happy with it, it's just that I'm not.



Edit: Nevermind.

Anyway, thanks for all the help.
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If they're happy with it, sell it; dont make they less happy... :P
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:) They want me to present it to the whole company on monday. Yay for successful first Flash jobs!
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Cool... Good luck with the presentation
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SilverFox wrote:
Okay, thanks for the help - I took it all to heart, but what does this mean "cut down the copy a little"?


copy === content, words, text :)
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Adde wrote:
I would recommend another type of music... hehe.... if they havent choosed it... i think that that music sounds like "im-on-the-beach"-music. :P


Sounds like the music from oceans 11 to me :D
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Oh, okay. Thanks, DM.

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