Help sprucing up this flash animation?

Hi, all. I just joined (been reading for about two months.) I've been hired by Bowman Systems (http://www.bowmansystems.com) to do a Flash animation demonstrating their software, Servicepoint (servicept.com) , but I only learned flash shortly before getting the job, so my animation is sort of unimpressive, in my opinion. What can I do to help make this a little flashier -- not too over the top, this is a highly respected company, it has got to maintain the corporate aesthetic -- but, to liven it up, a little?

Here's the temporary page I threw this thing up on:

http://s92212976.onlinehome.us/Dpixl8/m ... /link.html

Any help / suggestions? I've got a .fla if anyone wants it - 3 mb.


Thanks
- Hunter

My suggestion would be to move things along faster. I think you can do a better job of punctuating and emphasizing ideas if things snapped into place a little faster and tighter. I think it would be better if you cut down the copy a little.

I really didn't care for the copyright in the top-left corner.

If you're going to move things behind the controls at the bottom, I think you should put a background under the controls but above the moving bits.

My 2 cents.

//the controls are a bit confusing. I would seperate the navigation controls from the music controls.

HTH!

Okay, thanks for the help - I took it all to heart, but what does this mean "cut down the copy a little"?

Bump?

I would recommend another type of music... hehe.... if they havent choosed it... i think that that music sounds like "im-on-the-beach"-music.

I've been looking all over for a music substitute they'd like, but they seem pretty set on this one. Meh, oh well.


There are no other critiques?

If they like your movie and are willing to pay for it... just sell it...... or what i shall say ^^

I know. They're happy with it, it's just that I'm not.



Edit: Nevermind.

Anyway, thanks for all the help.

If they're happy with it, sell it; dont make they less happy...

They want me to present it to the whole company on monday. Yay for successful first Flash jobs!

Cool... Good luck with the presentation

copy === content, words, text

Sounds like the music from oceans 11 to me

Oh, okay. Thanks, DM.